Chocolate Writing Experience

A few weeks ago,  we got to eat chocolate. Once we eat it, we then had to write about, just like the Autumn writing. If you would like a better explanation, see my Autumn Writing in Progress post, but change it to chocolate.

This is my work in progress-

Attempt 1: I felt a hard chocolate shell. I see smooth chocolate sides with a broken bottom. I smell cocoa sprinkles on top of a bubbly coffy. I taste a taste that is smooth and chilled chocolate milk.

Attempt 2: I felt a solid chocolate surface that melted when I touched it too long. I see the chocolate sides that with every second looking at it, the more it want to eat it. I smell a smell that with every sniff makes me want to drift myself into Chocolate Dream World. I fall in love with the chocolate that made me want to eat it even more. When I tried to eat the gooey, delicious, brown, helpless little piece of chocolate, I felt something stop me. I think for a while, watching the chocolate slowly melt. I feel my taste buds partying ready for the blast of flavor, so was my stomach. My nerves  were thinking nothing was happening, only the everyday normal routine. I count to 3. 3, my taste was dribbling. 2, I tasted the chocolate before I could lick it. 1, oh, how was I ready! 0! Crunch! I took a nibble. My tastebuds were digging in, trying to push it all down my throat. It tasted ordinary. My body went quite. It was all gone. Now what is there to be excited?

Attempt 3: “Thank you” I say to Mrs Key as she handed me a brown, smooth, sticky peice of chocolate. I wonder what type it is? I asked myself. “Once you’re ready, you can eat the chocolate.” I heard Miss McLeod say over and over again. I was ready. Suddenly, I felt that nothing exciting is happening. My taste buds were setting up for a party. My stomach was tingaling. My neaves thought that I was doing the same old routine we do everyday. Then I countdown, still my neaves feeling normal. 3, my tastebuds were chanting, eat it! Eat it! 2, my stomach was swirling around, giving me butterflies. 1, my throat was drying up, making way for the gooey chocolate. 0! I ate it in one bite. My tastebuds were rubbing against it. It then pushed it down while a few taste buds were still rubbing. The chocolate was dissolving very slowly in my stomach. Now I know why my nerves were not excited about this piece of chocolate. It was all gone. The party was over. There was nothing left.

Attempt 4: “Chatter, chatter,chatter.” That's all I heard as soon the teacher said we were going to eat chocolate. I sit up, not talking. I know very soon the teacher was going to say “Uh, can you all be quite.” She said it. I got handed a piece of chocolate. I was in love with it's richness in taste, the chocolate melting on my hand and the oozing shape. I was about to eat the delicious looking piece of lollie. I was opening my mouth, my tastebuds dancing around with each other. They couldn't wait to dig in. I felt my stomach swirling around so much it gave me butterflies. But then my nerves drop in excitement. I get caught up wondering why. No time, I want to taste it. I needed it! I decided to count down. 3, I could feel my mouth dripping, making me lick my lips. 2, I felt very hungry even though I just had a big morning tea. 1, I was breathing out loud, I just could’ent hold it in. 0! I eat the whole thing. My taste buds were melting the block and soon they started to push the goo down. As it went down, it left a stain in my esophagus. My stomach was dissolving the remains. Now I know why my nerves were not excited. It was all gone. Back to the normal silentness. The party was over.

Attempt 5: “Chatter, chatter,chatter.” That's all I heard as soon the teacher said we were going to eat chocolate. I sat up, not talking but showing respect to the teachers. I know very soon the teacher was going to say “Uh, can you all be quiet.” She said it. I got handed a piece of melting Cadbury chocolate. I was in love with it's richness in taste, the chocolate melting on my hand and the oozing appearance. I was about to eat the delicious looking piece of lollie. I was opening my mouth, my tastebuds dancing around with each other. They couldn't wait to dig in. I felt my stomach swirling around so much it gave me butterflies. But then my nerves drop in excitement. I get caught up wondering why. No time to wait, I want to taste it. I needed to! I started to count down. 3, I could feel my mouth dripping, making me lick my lips. 2, I felt very hungry even though I just had a big morning tea. 1, I was breathing out loud, I just couldn't hold it in. 0! I eat the whole thing. My taste buds were melting the block and soon they started to push the goo down. As it went down, it left a stain in my esophagus. My stomach was dissolving the remains. Now I know why my nerves were not excited. It was all gone. Back to the normal silentness. The party was over.